by bels » Sat Jan 18, 2014 7:13 am
Smiles you're up for the next WICTW I believe.
soundclip I think you could lose "invisible" from invisible strings, "thin" from think blanket.
The sentence "Everyone else can sense it, you don’t know what it is, but it makes your insides seize with aversion." feels a bit clunky to me.
I like the last line about the doctor.